Version 1
Way too long for a 1 minute film. This was the script used for my first storyboard and I should have known from this three page script that the story was already too long in general. I also cut too many times from back and forth from one place to another meaning many shots to be animated which just makes the overall process much harder in the future. What I should have done was plan out short story beats then extend those into fleshed out scenes. Then planned those scenes into shots using this script. In the future I will do this as it makes it a lot easier to plan out individual shots rather than grouping an entire scene into one shot.
Version 2
Much shorter already by a page and is much more to the point as before. I limited the backdrop to only one area so it is easier to follow and therefore I can focus more on the shots individually than the differing environments and how to reintroduce them each time. Although this was still too long in the end I am glad I at least did a second version before moving onto storyboards as this version helped me to visualise and create panels for my first storyboard draft.